Poem= Weep away the night

[khaotik]

This is a poem I created, what do you think?

Eyes hold no secrets from me
I see deep within
From the core of darkest secrets
Dwelling in your heart

Your words are soft, saying little
But hide the lies you tell
From your eyes I see the truth
I know what you mean.

When you say yes, you truly mean no
You give me false hope
The eyes show the truth you hide
It hurts me just so.

Your dealing damage with each little lie;
Hiding behind your words
The truth is much better you see,
but you must punish me so

In torment I wait for you to tell truth
A year from now maybe?
But the damage you dealt will never heal
Trust you not by now.

I ask you out, and you say maybe
But I know the truth
The answer is no, why should I ask
From your lips spill the lies.

No intention to ever say yes,
You hold yourself aloof
To deal with this, i must withdraw
To myself once again.

Away from the pain , away from the hurt
life is such a mess
Suffer the mind with little words
Lies that never fade

The lips are lies, eyes tell this
Trust not what they say
To trust is to hurt, so shy away
There are no truths to be heard.

The ears crack, and burst, and bleed,
the lies fall upon deaf ears
to hear them not is habit now;
Ignoring what you say.

Away from the world, into the dark
To deal with myself
Armored in ice, in cold and dark
to wipe away your lies.

A cold heart now resides where a warm one used to beat
the icy tombs of sorrow and strife, armor against your lies
Turning away from your beautiful face, those falsehoods you speak.
To hideaway in the shadows of icy memories

The heart is cold, and the eyes see truth, no more have you to say
The love once felt now is gone
Nothing else to feel.
Down to the dark in shadows lie, to weep away the night.

[ミ★ #Ř!ĈķŸ♫★]

i have a different opinion in poem i think it should always rhyme

[Aliean]

Very nice Khaotik. It conveys a lot of emotion in my opinion.

[A Woket]

Pretty good. I've got a few. Hmm, should start a peoms only thread.

[methodicaleddie]

i have raps HAHAHAHHA

[A Woket]

Originally Posted by methodicaleddie

i have raps HAHAHAHHA

Lets here one.

[methodicaleddie]

lmfao, i would, but no one understands them... i kinda am like mf doom with the randomness and weirdness... none of them are recorded, theyre just written

[ミ★ #Ř!ĈķŸ♫★]

who cares lets hear it

[methodicaleddie]

i'll sail the seas, until i find the shore
navigate! my way to the door
the current's all i got
besides french fries, beer, and flip flops
got my knowledge tied up in knots
whatever is left of it, i forgot
my mood excells beneath the wind's grooves
and i love the way my shindig moves
i bug every patty, until they elude
sorry girl, that's just how we do
i place hate with love, because the two relate
reside in mental states that defecate
i'm a lazy fellow, so i slur my words
not good at lying, so i kick it to the curb
i got these little kiddies following me like sheep herds
when i move... you do the booty dew
power and insanity, it's all askew

but it's whatevers...
frowns to smiles changing the weather
i'm down, as long as it's not together
i lose focus with other people around
dick to ear, fucking with my sound
pound for pound, i shit on heads
that like to think we're all good friends
i break bread with evil spirits
coming up to me with quantity, thinking i'll fear it
but i tend to steer it, in my own direction
teach these fools a lingering lesson
and as long as i'm confessing
i'm at my best when i'm intoxicated
10 beers in and i'm so elated
now i sound like a drunk
but i'm really just another punk
trying to succeed in this rat race
find my own pace, that'll captivate
embrace thought and set it straight
commemorate!

flowing lifelessly amongst the waves
its straight poetry when i talk to babes
keepin' it real til' the end of days
burn through brains like UV rays
complexity... is my shadow
i like to think that i'm as sharp as an arrow
i travel the roads from wide to narrow
and my depth is endless like an infinite barrel
immaculate misconception
wearing disguises to keep fools guessing
just chill back, your noise is deafening
the method to the madness is definite
no questioning, i'm mister prevalent
my ways are sickening... decadent
i'm methodical even when menacing
booze pleads to be my best medicine
that's why the remedy stays festering

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roflmao.

[ミ★ #Ř!ĈķŸ♫★]

how does the rhythm go lol